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A 'forgotten' past...

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Micki

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Leeftijd: 15
Remission: Neutral

BerichtOnderwerp: A 'forgotten' past... do feb 14, 2013 7:21 am

Het is in het engels. Het spijt me. Vragen of opmerkingen graag PM of Comment Smile
[edit]: NIEUWE STUKKEN STAAN ONDER DEZE DEEL HOU HET DUS IN DE GATEN!!! je kan het herkennen aan de dubbele Alinea space.

A 'forgotten' past

She sat there by a campfire, muttering to snow. Snow was her pet, Some people were scared of him. Micki was never surprised by it. He was a tiger after all. “I am not sure what happened.” She looked at snow who was looking at her. As she started to talk to the tiger. She continued further. “I remember it all… so clear I think. I wished… I forgot it through…” I remember I was running, running and running. Something was behind me. It was faster than me. Grabbed me and took me with it. As I woke up, my head was spinning. The walls were covered by something red. It was moving, breathing… While I stood up I saw some strange liquid on the floor. And some rose petals. “Mom? Dad?.... anyone?” I started to lose hope. Where was everyone? Where was I? More important. Who. Am. I?

The door behind her started to crack. Like something or someone was hitting on it. First part of the door broke off. There was something there. It had brown grey sort of skin. One hand the other one was a knife looked like hand. She didn’t know what was going on. But made sure to hide. There was a small opening in the wall. The girl crouched through it, Hoping it would not find her here. The door was slammed open by an incredible force. It walked past it and past it again. She let out a little bit of air, The girl was relieved it didn’t found her. Then, it stood right in front of her. Those little nasty red dots as eyes were looking at her, searching for her. There was no air or oxygen coming from it. It was like…it was death. The girl kept silent and waited, He was in less of two meters away from her. Its eyes went from left to right. It was like he wasn’t able to see her if the girl were to keep silent. After a half of a hour, it finally left. As she left the crack. she searched for items. ‘Why is it after me? What did I do?’ Many questions spooked in trough her head.
After a while of searching she found some tinderboxes, A key unlabelled and a bucket. The girl left the room. What wasn’t looking very friendly. The next room looked like a study room. Lots of paper work as well. Quickly she run through the papers, hoping to find some answers. She did found one paper. But that didn’t make any sense!

“23 July
The manager of this house let me stay here for a while. It was really nice of him.
Too bad our touring car broke. Many guests are complaining, after a while they did better they felt welcome.
I don’t feel that welcome here. There is a uneasy feeling about this house.
I’m not sure what it is… It might be my imagination.”



She lit the candle with one of her tinderboxes and continued further through the house. There was a corridor with many door on each side. First up was the left room. It didn’t open like she wanted, It didn’t budge. The right one opened at a little piece, from where she saw some dead and naked bodies. She was glad they were upside down. She only saw the backs. ‘what happened here?’ there were questions in her head. That still were unanswered. At the end of the hall there was a red coloured wooden door. She walked towards it and opened the door. It made a squeaky noise.


{ To be continued }


Laatst aangepast door Micki op di feb 19, 2013 1:38 am; in totaal 2 keer bewerkt
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... do feb 14, 2013 11:11 pm

Chills went over her back. The stone round room looked ice cold and lonely at the same time. There was a staircase, the left side of the stairs were broken fallen apart. A fountain filled the room a bit. Just like the red soft banners on the floor and on the wall. Some of the banners were torn apart or half burned. There were again some rose petals. She slowly walked towards the fountain… It was a strange sight. A cater bee with a dog’s face. There was water flowing from the dog’s mouth. The edges of the fountain were rocky and not smooth. There were female legs as well. A faint scream was heard through the house. It sounded like a women. It came from the left side of the room.

The girl didn’t hesitate and walked towards that room. Not knowing what was behind it. The stairs went down. She opened another red coloured door. The sound was getting stronger the closer she got toward it. She tried a door, it got smashed towards her. The girl let go of a little scream. She directly silenced herself. The candle was blown out by a gust of wind. The door was also blown open. There was some fresh blood on the back of the door. Pieces meat on the floor, scattered… Another chill welcomed her. Scared to go back, Also scared to go further. Pieces and blood were scattered everywhere. Something walked down the stairs. It was growling and walking strange. The girl recognized it and ran in the room that was shut closed a moment ago.



Inside the room there was a faint shimmer. She got closer to the light. It was like she was drawn towards it. Something was hitting the door again and the girl looked at the door. Her eyes narrowed, her hart started to beat faster. The door was slammed in and the creature walked towards her. The girl was frozen in place. The creature ran towards her. Ready to hit. Suddenly the girl started to run, past him. Closing every door she encountered. Fear was striking her heart. Fear that she never saw her family. Fear that she died here, while no one knew she was there. She kept running, the thing was chasing her. It was faster, it broke through every door she closed. It was closing in. There were so many different sounds. Screams, Growls, things falling apart.
She ran corners, circles and she stumbled to a dead end. ‘What do I do?! What do I do?! I don’t want to die!’ Tears were falling off her face. Was this the end for her? Minutes went past, The creature didn’t show up. Did she lost him? She walked back slowly and with care. The creature was nowhere near in sight. ‘Thank god.’ Tears stumbled down from her eyes. She was alive! She had a chance to find out what happened! She walked back in to the room she was in with the shimmer. The shimmer was gone. But there were left some few notes.

“ First of August.
Happy Birthday my dear! I hope you have a nice birthday! Were really sorry we can’t be there with you today. We have a huge gift for you in a small wrapping. It’s something we can do with us all! We will see you then, And don’t forget to bring something with you! It’s called a ticket!
Greetings,
Your Mother.
PS: really… Don’t forget the ticket.”

Was this… my room?’ She looked around. There was a drawer, There was another note in it. She quickly read it.

“ 5th of July.
There is this huge touring car! I really like this gift! And I am glad I didn’t lost that ticket. I was angry at first at them. But now I know why they had to go towards there. To get the money of course! We’re starting off in London. They have no exact destination planned. But they go where ever they like to go to. Hope this will be a great vacation!”
{ To be continued }


Laatst aangepast door Micki op zo feb 17, 2013 8:00 pm; in totaal 1 keer bewerkt
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 15, 2013 6:32 am

‘I see now… I was at a vacation. The order of these notes must be… First of August.. Then July the fifth. And July the 23! I wonder… Who was the one that screamed through…’ As she looked further she found a half written note on a desk… It was hardly readable.

“2…th Of Ju...
Dear daughter. I ho……… it this let………
……… Away from here. If you ……this, I’m ……
… drink the wine! It’……… you.
……………………………”
The rest of the note was covered in wine and blood. ‘What does this letter want to tell me? Was this… my mom?’ She looked at the letter again. Wondering of it really came from her mom. She had no time to think it over. There was more red stuff on the wall coming. She grabbed the letter an ran for it again. Back to the entrance Hall. The fountain, which was already strange, had now red blood water. She no longer touched the water. She looked around. What could it be? When she was on top of the staircase there was a small tremble. The staircase behind her. Collapsed.

She slowly walked inside a room with a lantern she found a little while back. She stumbled upon a door that was locked. She turned around to find the key. After a lot of searching she found it, In the guest room. She walked back, The house was trembling again. Only this time. There was no red stuff. The door was being slammed again. The girl went fast into a closet and put off the lantern. She waited in silent, listening where it was or if it even was here. She didn’t hear anything, No footsteps no… no nothing! The closet door opened at a centimetre while the girl was looking through it. The monster was right in front of her. A chill ran upon her spine. This was a different monster. These had claws… robes around his body en a wipe open mouth. It turned around and walked away. It wasn’t really a walk., more of a waggle…
She slowly got out of the closet. The closed door opened, what she didn’t notice was the hole inside of that door. She fell. The sight for other weren’t that best… A few half eater corpses. The water was red by the colour of the blood of course. She was able to swim. ‘Thanks god I can swim alright…’ Right at that moment she felt something by her legs. Directly she pulled up her legs and got grabbed. She felt long nails, Teeth on her soft flesh. She hitted something with the lantern and got on the stones as fast as possible. What was there in the water? She looked at her leg. It was bleeding, Those nails were sharper then they felt. ‘Must have a plan B… ‘ She looked at her pockets. A unlabelled key, 4 Tinderboxes, A broken lantern and a few wet pages. ‘I still got a bucket… could I scoop him up?’ She tried. And she got the thing in the bucket… she tried to walk in the undeep water, Nothing came towards her. She make sure not to stray from her path and walked almost run forward to the door.

{ To be continued }
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 15, 2013 10:11 pm

This one was locked. But she made sure not to miss anything. She tried to unlabelled one… Surprisingly it worked! The door was open, a roar was heard from the bucket far behind. She got through the door. Something here smelled funny. But she wasn’t sure what it was. As she continued further the smell got worse, you could also hear the machines. The noise drowns out everything. She went to the left side of it. She never knew the monster was already behind her. Following her, The sounds he made didn’t reach the girl. She reached the room it was opened. She went through and got slammed from behind.

Her head was pounding, she moaned and opened her eyes. She was moving, she looked around, where was she going? She got a glimpse of the monster who was dragging her around. Threw her in a prison and left. ‘Why… Why is this happening to me?’ Her voice got softer and tears run from her eyes. The monster came back, throwing some bread in the prison and walked away. Was he doing this under control? ‘Why is he keeping me alive?’ She took a look on the bread. It was fresh baked bread. What was going on here? Of course she was hungry but she did double checked the bread. You could never be too sure about some stuff. The bread looks safe so she started to eat a little bit of it. She looked through the room. There was a photo and a another few notes, key and more blood… On the photo there was a happy family.


That was when we were 10 years old… I remember so well, We were at our first vacation. Sis got sick that year… She blamed me ever since…’She took a look at the notes that were close by.

{ To be continued } [/center]


Laatst aangepast door Micki op zo feb 17, 2013 8:00 pm; in totaal 1 keer bewerkt
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... zo feb 17, 2013 7:59 pm

She took a look at the notes that were close by.
“ my dear daughter.
I’m sorry we gave you this. It wasn’t our intention to do this. Were already here when it was too late to turn back. We still hope you have a good time. There was a lot of strange noises when we came here. Your mother and I tried to find out what it was. There was a strange shimmer when I got closer to it. I was brought to a hidden centrum. There were a lot of torturing stuff. We would never have gone here if we didn’t had seen it with our eyes. The last thing I know was waking up here. There were many more bodies here. People from the car as well. I do not know how long we will be able to stay alive. my chest feels like it is going to burst any moment. Do me one thing micki.
Stay Alive.“

Another note drawn her attention. It was written in blood.

“Dear Micki.
We were able to get along for so long. Until that day, you cursed me. You let me pick up a orb. Fast after that I collapsed with fever. The orb was never heard of seen off. After my recovery, everything changed. I had information no one knew off. Mom got worried I bumped my head while I collapsed. Dad never spoke to me. And all above that, You were the blame of it all. I did became best in classes, studied biologic, alchemy, forgotten languages and more. I was done at a year of 14. I knew it all, yet mom and dad never looked up to me. They pity you, you were younger. That’s why I gave mom and dad this birthday gift for you. Wasn’t that hard, Put it in a envelop with the text ‘You are the winner’. Tickets, money everything was in it. No one ever suspected it. I broke the touring car you know? These monster will do as I please. I want to keep you alive for now. You will end this curse on me, You will be the perfect sacrifice. So keep it cosy in there. Many were before you.
Your sister. “

Micki’s didn’t felt right after what she had read. What could this mean? Was she the blame for everything? Everything she was going through, or was this another trick of her? Her hunger to bread or any other food was gone. She ran to the lock and tried to open it. She had to get away from here! The lock was old but sturdy. They key she had didn’t fit. She tried to break it with rocks. What didn’t help either.

{ To be continued } [/center]
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... di feb 19, 2013 1:38 am

It was like there was no escape possible. ‘Glad there is a breeze through…’ She thought without thinking. ‘’ wait… A breeze?! ‘’ She searched where the breeze was coming from. It was coming from a tiny hole underneath the bed. ‘This is too small for me to fit through…’She thought. This was perhaps her only way out. She had to try at least something! She tried to widen up the hole with her hands, without luck. Her hands were hurting while she tried. The stones were too rough for her. She smashed a stone against it. This had a little effect on it. There has to be some way! She kept telling herself. She looked around in her cell. Not much what she was able to use. The monster came back. Threw another bread and a bottle with water inside. Micki fast ran to the bread. Playing like she was hungry like hell. The monster walked away again, Micki saw that the monster walked past a hammer. That might be it! The hammer! She could not ask that monster for the hammer, It never bended that much or give it to her.

Boxes were broken down and the planks were made together with robes. It missed the hammer at a centimetre, Shit… She said. She tried again and she got the hammer. Now slowly but surely she dragged the hammer towards her. She got the hammer. This time, She had to be able to widen up that hole. She lifted the hammer up to above her head and gave enough force to wide it up a bit. She continued faster, That monster had to hear this all. She grabbed the bottle and went through the hole that now was big enough. She heard that monster slamming the locks. She was away from it for now.

She came in a basement look-alike. The walls were from stones, floor were of stones it felt cold to the bone. She tried to get it all at one line. Without a luck, she was too confused about all of this. Her mother was no more… she was the one that screamed.. The dead body with almost no recognizable facts about the body had to be her dad. But… where was her big sister? The wound at her leg became to hurt every step she took. By the candle she took a look. The wound was full of dirt and other things. The tried to clean the wound a bit with the water. Of course it hurting and the most of the dirt was gone, but the wound had started to bleed again. A gigantic roar was heard from the place where she came. The girl made sure to run left right, through the door, left again she hitted a dead end. Another breeze was felt and some rose petals were found. She saw boxes in front of it. There was a hole! She crouched through. Putted the boxes at the same place behind her. After a lot of crawling she heard a wrecking noise behind her. The boxes were getting shattered. The girl putted some more speed in it. Her leg began to feel numb from pain while she continued. ‘T. there is light! I see light!’ She screamed and ran outside the tunnel in to the grass.

The grass felt wonderful to her. Freedom, Fresh air, Sunlight. All these things she had missed to much were back. I'm... Im free from it all' She said with a big relieve. Tears of happyness, sadness and tress were rolling down her face. There was that roar again, She looked behind her, Nothing was unseen then she started to run through the forest. The rocks were hurting her feet but she didn’t mind, She was free but still running away… She ran so much she was exhausted, Her body began to feel heavy and numb at the same time. She fell down to her knees, she breathed heavy and fast. ‘I’m free, I am finally free again…’ with those thoughts she felt asleep. Away from that nasty house. The monsters? They were not able to get outside of that house. Sunlight and direct moonlight would burn them to ashes.

There was a small girl sleeping between the coloured leaves of the forest, her cloths were dirty and ragged out from every angle. Her leg had a long, open wound. Her hair was long, filthy and not to mention tangled. But, she had a smile on her face, tears were rolling down in her sleep. She was finally in peace.


The End of “The ‘Forgotten’ Past”
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Nina

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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... di feb 19, 2013 7:42 am

SPANNEEND!!!!!! VET GOED GEDAAN!!!!!!

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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 22, 2013 1:36 am

Er komt nog een deel aan ^^ daar zit ook een cover bij denk ik... weet ik nog niet XD
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Kuro

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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 22, 2013 2:02 am

Ik moet zeggen, dat heb je erg netjes gedaan Anique. Heel mooi spanning opgebouwd. Toppie Smile
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Micki

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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 22, 2013 2:12 am

Ta ^^
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BerichtOnderwerp: Re: A 'forgotten' past... vr feb 22, 2013 7:21 am

damn dat is een verdomd goed verhaal:P zeker spannend Razz
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